Hi Silafaga I think you should check the punctuation before you post your work because you misspelled makes (You spelt it like maks) and the I's should be capital letters, you also didn't put a full stop at the end, but other than that I think it's a good piece of writing.
Hi Silafaga I think you should check the punctuation before you post your work because you misspelled makes (You spelt it like maks) and the I's should be capital letters, you also didn't put a full stop at the end, but other than that I think it's a good piece of writing.
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